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Fight On Pt2 - WestGamer
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 22, 2006 7:38 pm 
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Hey all now that the fan fiction forums seem to becoming alive again I thought I might post some more stuff up involving our favourite psycho marine, enjoy!

The marine dove as heavy bolter fire ripped apart the section of street he was in barely a few seconds before. The night was lit by the strobing blasts of gunfire and tracer rounds as they whipped their way down the streets of the war-torn hive. The bitterly cold night air was thick with smoke that was occasionally lit up as a massive explosion ripped apart buildings and troops. The sub-sonic booms of lightnings and thunderhawks as they cleaved the air on attack runs buffeted the fragile ruins. The marine took stock of the situation, he had been separated from his squad minutes previously as a vast chain of artillery fire had pounded the building they were holding into dust and debris. Enemy troops rebel PDF had attacked in the dust and smoke, special weapon troopers cutting down marines before being ripped apart by bolter fire. The marine had charged into them hacking them apart with his power sword before charging after the others that had fled. The magnetic flux and interference caused by the sheer mass of buildings and explosions made vox-contact impossible and the ever changing landscape impossible to navigate. When in doubt advance

The marine smashed through the door of the building, moving stealthily through the rooms to enfilade the heavy bolter team holding the street. I feel something, a dull sensation, an ache of the soul, and its coming from up ahead With a roar the marine burst through the wall the five PDF troopers being ripped apart in seconds by bolter fire until only one remained, an officer by the look of him. I need information The officer fired his laspistol desperately at the armored giant. With a contemptuous backhanded blow the pistol went skittering down the street. The marine picked the officer up by the scruff of his jacket.
“Tell me where your forces are deployed wretchâ€


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Dude this stuff rocks


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Another home run for olly p.!

Only one gripe though.
"Blue energy from the power sword blazed against the red glow of the power sword."
I dont think this sentence meshes very well. Could you use a description other than "the power sword" for one of them?

Loved it all the same!

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it has been fixed, I agree bit of a dodgy sentence.


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awesome story, i luv it! very interging!

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I read a couple of paragraphs and had to force myself to pull away to continue with homework. That alone tells me its awsome :D! Great work!!


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Damn man! Not bad at all. Killing the Trator with his own weapon. Nice touch.

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Thank you all! Glad you all like it, I shall endeavor to bring some more of our favourite marine as he ups the ante a bit, but with conflict on this weekend it may have to wait, but I shall try!


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So you'll be at Conflict, eh? Hmm, interesting...

See you there :twisted: ...

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